Chapter Four *YOUTUBE!*

Well, it'd be better if the line didn't sound like he already knew the bandits were there...

Well, seeing as Snow warned him about them in the last chapter, it would only make sense.

...Damn.
I just watched Ep. 3 again.
Okay then. How about 'Damn! Bandits' or 'I knew we'd find Bandits sooner or later'.
Something with a little more pizazz then just 'Oh no, it's the bandits'.

OH NO IT'S THE BANDITS

-Cue Yakkety Sax and door chase scen-

I like "Damn! Bandits"

I've got to work on it some more today. I don't know when I'll be able to post an update, though, so hang in there. The good news is the next update is going to have some BA action.

Awesome.

More work was done yesterday, I'll probably have some time to work on it today. I gotta say, the action is coming out pretty good.

I got even more work done today. I hope I'll have this much free time next week. Tomorrow I will post an update to this chapter for sure.

Update! Woohoo!

http://sirtopeia.com/users/blizzardblade/chapters/Ep%204.swf

...
You know what?

I JUST noticed Jishen has a full beard.

Only now.
I've just noticed.
I should really get more done on those archers.

Eh...
Animation is looking pretty good so far...

But the dialogue is really bothering me..

Woot update!

Looking good!

Thanks!

Deuxelim wrote:

Eh...
Animation is looking pretty good so far...

But the dialogue is really bothering me..

So far you've only pointed out one problem that wasn't even that big of a deal.

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Thanks!

Deuxelim wrote:

Eh...
Animation is looking pretty good so far...

But the dialogue is really bothering me..

So far you've only pointed out one problem that wasn't even that big of a deal.

it is for me...

I like where this is going.

Well it seems perfectly f-

OH HOHOHOHOHOHOHO~

WHAT'S THIS IS SEE

A REALLY OLD CRAPPY JPEG FRAME

KORAH YOU DOG

I NARY DOUBT YOU HAD IT IN YOU TO DIG UP SOMETHING LIKE THAT AND ACTUALLY USE IT

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Well it just sounds anarchic.

Like it wouldn't fit around the time period, or atleast the way Korah speaks.
It doesn't make me feel emotional connected to the character.

It doesn't show to much of his persona.

Too generic.

Deuxelim wrote:

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Well it just sounds anarchic.

Like it wouldn't fit around the time period, or atleast the way Korah speaks.
It doesn't make me feel emotional connected to the character.

It doesn't show to much of his persona.

Too generic.

Y'Know what.

Maybe... Just as a little inside joke... We should constantly make Korah state the unbeleivably obvious.
He already does it a lot...

So why not.

OH NO IT'S BANDITS!



On another note, Although I could write the script completely if I wanted to, you guys probably would get mad, Korah would probably say no, and It would have more bad puns and references than you can shake a stick at.

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Well it just sounds anarchic.

Like it wouldn't fit around the time period, or atleast the way Korah speaks.
It doesn't make me feel emotional connected to the character.

It doesn't show to much of his persona.

Too generic.

Y'Know what.

Maybe... Just as a little inside joke... We should constantly make Korah state the unbeleivably obvious.
He already does it a lot...

So why not.

OH NO IT'S BANDITS!



On another note, Although I could write the script completely if I wanted to, you guys probably would get mad, Korah would probably say no, and It would have more bad puns and references than you can shake a stick at.

My Probelm is...

OH NO IT'S THE BANDITS!

Deuxelim wrote:

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Well it just sounds anarchic.

Like it wouldn't fit around the time period, or atleast the way Korah speaks.
It doesn't make me feel emotional connected to the character.

It doesn't show to much of his persona.

Too generic.

Y'Know what.

Maybe... Just as a little inside joke... We should constantly make Korah state the unbeleivably obvious.
He already does it a lot...

So why not.

OH NO IT'S BANDITS!



On another note, Although I could write the script completely if I wanted to, you guys probably would get mad, Korah would probably say no, and It would have more bad puns and references than you can shake a stick at.

My Probelm is...

OH NO IT'S THE BANDITS!

Yeah, we've all expressed problems with it.
If to fit in with the time a little better it should be...

"Blast! Bandits!"

Deuxelim wrote:

Snow Taradien wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

Am I the only one concerned with the dialogue?

No. If you name all the problems you have with the dialogue, and I'll see what I can do to fix it...
In the end it's up to korah though.

Well it just sounds anarchic.

Like it wouldn't fit around the time period, or atleast the way Korah speaks.
It doesn't make me feel emotional connected to the character.

It doesn't show to much of his persona.

Too generic.

Damnit Deux, reverse timeflow. This could be in a timeframe beyond our own, on a planet in a galaxy far away. Maybe the standard for our generations is the same everywhere else. Just maybe.

ABOUT CRAPPY JPEG: I didn't notice it until after I exported it, and I was too lazy to fix at that time. I'll fix it, though.

ABOUT DIALOGUE: If you guys are so concerned about the dialogue, why not fixing it yourselves and posting it in another topic? I'll gladly change it if the rest of the people here agrees. And yes, seeing as this is a different planet, so to speak, the dialogue doesn't have to match the time period.

I thought it was pretty good. Like i told you before, just a little more variety with the sword attacks would be mother freakin awesome. the new ice powers are pretty creative though, they look good.