Chapter Four *YOUTUBE!*

Yup. I've actually did something these past few days already. And because now I have a Sirtopiean server, no more downloads for previews!





It's not much, but I just need some opinions on the sprites, camera angles and dialogue. For now, it looks like I'm going to have to wait for some sprites. The village and villager sprites are no longer required, because I figured out a way to tell the story without using the other sprites. I'm still going to need the bandits, knights, the bandit leader and General Brine, though. Oh, and the dragon. Can't forget about that.

YAY FOR NO MORE DOWNLOADS!
Also, it looks great so far. but the music after Snow leaves Korah is kinda loud...

Other than the fact that the music is looped a bit oddly, it's epik so far.

The dialogue seems to be fine so far.

Sprites... You get +1 win for doing a shot of Snow from behind...

Also, the temple looked good, inside and out.

The first Angled Korah's blade should be changed in terms of position.

Snow's arms need to be longer and more obvious.

Besides that, I think it's good.

To fix the Looping problem with the music that plays during the part with Snow, better known as Angel's Fear...
Make the loop happen around 39/40 seconds.

Luna wrote:

YAY FOR NO MORE DOWNLOADS!
Also, it looks great so far. but the music after Snow leaves Korah is kinda loud...

I shall go and fix.

Snow Taradien wrote:

Other than the fact that the music is looped a bit oddly, it's epik so far.

The dialogue seems to be fine so far.

Sprites... You get +1 win for doing a shot of Snow from behind...

Also, the temple looked good, inside and out.

Spriting him from behind took awhile.

Chaosvii7 wrote:

The first Angled Korah's blade should be changed in terms of position.

Snow's arms need to be longer and more obvious.

Besides that, I think it's good.

For Snow's arms, do you mean in the behind angle one too?

Snow Taradien wrote:

To fix the Looping problem with the music that plays during the part with Snow, better known as Angel's Fear...
Make the loop happen around 39/40 seconds.

No can do. I can't have the song too long because that takes up too much space. I think it loops perfect so far.

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Chaosvii7 wrote:

The first Angled Korah's blade should be changed in terms of position.

Snow's arms need to be longer and more obvious.

Besides that, I think it's good.

For Snow's arms, do you mean in the behind angle one too?

Yes.

That's so cool, now I can get out my criticisms before the actual flash is done!

...
I guess I really need to step up work on those bandits, don't I?

Yes.

By the way, I said I'd help, but you never mentioned what I was supposed to do and didn't give me any sprites to work with.

Alright...
Unlike everyone else Korah,
I had some probelms with the beginning of this particular episode preview..

First of the start where Snow and Korah are "walking" is fine.
But it looks more like they are jogging or running so to say.

it made much more sense if you had them say:
Korah: Hey Snow, we've been running for a while how much longer before we get of this place.
Snow: Not much longer.

Also you have them slow down and stop before showing the fork at in path.
then when now breaks away from Korah, you should show him doing so, instead of just moving to the next frame.
and then Show Snow heading off towards the temple instead him just being there.
and you should probaly emphaisize on the temple, maybe zooming in on Snow as he appears there.
and then Zoom in as he walks towards and in it.

Also i dislike the inside of the temple, I think it'd be wise to show snow, slowly walking up the balcony, and the camera view following him.
Other than that.

It was good.

Chaosvii7 wrote:

Yes.

By the way, I said I'd help, but you never mentioned what I was supposed to do and didn't give me any sprites to work with.

The sprites you need:
https://2img.net/h/i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc64/JonesFoLife/Brine_Walk_Full.png
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/gsu-s-tlok-sprites-t248.htm
And things I need from them are:
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/basic-requirements-for-characters-t239.htm

Deuxelim wrote:

Alright...
Unlike everyone else Korah,
I had some probelms with the beginning of this particular episode preview..

First of the start where Snow and Korah are "walking" is fine.
But it looks more like they are jogging or running so to say.

it made much more sense if you had them say:
Korah: Hey Snow, we've been running for a while how much longer before we get of this place.
Snow: Not much longer.

Also you have them slow down and stop before showing the fork at in path.

Okay.

Deuxelim wrote:

then when now breaks away from Korah, you should show him doing so, instead of just moving to the next frame.
and then Show Snow heading off towards the temple instead him just being there.

Can you explain this better?

Deuxelim wrote:

and you should probaly emphaisize on the temple, maybe zooming in on Snow as he appears there.
and then Zoom in as he walks towards and in it.

That's possible.

Deuxelim wrote:

Also i dislike the inside of the temple, I think it'd be wise to show snow, slowly walking up the balcony, and the camera view following him.
Other than that.

It was good.

Can I get some other opinions on that last part?

I've worked on it some more today. I've fixed all the problems in all the posts, added some more dialogue, fixed some dialogue that I thought came out bad. At this point, I cannot continue without the knights, so no update till then. I'd post what I have done right now, but no one is here.

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

I've worked on it some more today. I've fixed all the problems in all the posts, added some more dialogue, fixed some dialogue that I thought came out bad. At this point, I cannot continue without the knights, so no update till then. I'd post what I have done right now, but no one is here.

I am.

^_^

It looks great so far! Can't wait to see the whole thing ;P

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

I've worked on it some more today. I've fixed all the problems in all the posts, added some more dialogue, fixed some dialogue that I thought came out bad. At this point, I cannot continue without the knights, so no update till then. I'd post what I have done right now, but no one is here.

I'm here.

So am I.

I'll help with whatever I can

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

GO MAKE ME SOME KNIGHTS

...

Oh, and hi.

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

WTF avatar?

JUS mamoru?

NF I'll work on teh Knight's.
Just show me what you have so far.

Deuxelim wrote:

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

WTF avatar?

JUS mamoru?

NF I'll work on teh Knight's.
Just show me what you have so far.

yeah, the drawing/scanning/coloring only took 20 mins.
ill help with the Knights

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

WTF avatar?

JUS mamoru?

NF I'll work on teh Knight's.
Just show me what you have so far.

yeah, the drawing/scanning/coloring only took 20 mins.
ill help with the Knights

Needs more Deux and DiS please.

Deuxelim wrote:

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

WTF avatar?

JUS mamoru?

NF I'll work on teh Knight's.
Just show me what you have so far.

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Chaosvii7 wrote:

Yes.

By the way, I said I'd help, but you never mentioned what I was supposed to do and didn't give me any sprites to work with.

The sprites you need:
https://2img.net/h/i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc64/JonesFoLife/Brine_Walk_Full.png
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/gsu-s-tlok-sprites-t248.htm
And things I need from them are:
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/basic-requirements-for-characters-t239.htm

And yes, Mamoru is orgasmic. (No homo)

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Deuxelim wrote:

KAZEnoMamoru wrote:

I'll help with whatever I can

WTF avatar?

JUS mamoru?

NF I'll work on teh Knight's.
Just show me what you have so far.

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Chaosvii7 wrote:

Yes.

By the way, I said I'd help, but you never mentioned what I was supposed to do and didn't give me any sprites to work with.

The sprites you need:
https://2img.net/h/i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc64/JonesFoLife/Brine_Walk_Full.png
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/gsu-s-tlok-sprites-t248.htm
And things I need from them are:
https://blizzardblade.forummotion.com/sprites-f5/basic-requirements-for-characters-t239.htm

And yes, Mamoru is orgasmic. (No homo)

I'll do Brine,
KAZE can do the Knights.

*Bump*
Brine thus far.

CURSE YOU YOU BRIGANDISH BRIGANDOID BRIGAND

I've got one new attack for him, and I'm working on the second.