Chapter Four Update?

**Aiden** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Nov 06, 2009 4:19 am

Also, forgive me for being picky but...
That drawing of Snow doesn't look so great. The lines are pretty messy.

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**Luna** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Nov 06, 2009 4:23 am

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Awesome. Damn man, this is getting better with each episode. Of course, they're all good. But I'm almost sure it'll be frontpage'd. In fact, if the other one was, this one HAS to be.

I kinda doubt it just cause the last one began with a fight scene.

Well, not all frontpaged stuff starts out with BOOM SHAKA LAKA. If they give it a chance, I'm certain they'll like it.
Also, I spotted a little something. Right before Snow remembers what happened to Rachel, his drawing moves back a little. Not all that important, but I doubt it was on purpose.

Most newgrounders will lose their attention with this flash in 2 minutes, and the action stuff don't happen till many minutes in.

Oh yeah, that's a tough thing to fix just because the way I made it.

Just add "WAIT FOR THE FIGHTSCENE, IT'S WORTH IT" on the author's notes or whatever. and D: no fix then?

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**Korah Hyoutetsu** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Nov 06, 2009 4:24 am

Luna wrote:

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Awesome. Damn man, this is getting better with each episode. Of course, they're all good. But I'm almost sure it'll be frontpage'd. In fact, if the other one was, this one HAS to be.

I kinda doubt it just cause the last one began with a fight scene.

Well, not all frontpaged stuff starts out with BOOM SHAKA LAKA. If they give it a chance, I'm certain they'll like it.
Also, I spotted a little something. Right before Snow remembers what happened to Rachel, his drawing moves back a little. Not all that important, but I doubt it was on purpose.

Most newgrounders will lose their attention with this flash in 2 minutes, and the action stuff don't happen till many minutes in.

Oh yeah, that's a tough thing to fix just because the way I made it.

Just add "WAIT FOR THE FIGHTSCENE, IT'S WORTH IT" on the author's notes or whatever. and D: no fix then?

Lol, I was thinking of writing that too.

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**Luna** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Nov 06, 2009 4:26 am

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Luna wrote:

Awesome. Damn man, this is getting better with each episode. Of course, they're all good. But I'm almost sure it'll be frontpage'd. In fact, if the other one was, this one HAS to be.

I kinda doubt it just cause the last one began with a fight scene.

Well, not all frontpaged stuff starts out with BOOM SHAKA LAKA. If they give it a chance, I'm certain they'll like it.
Also, I spotted a little something. Right before Snow remembers what happened to Rachel, his drawing moves back a little. Not all that important, but I doubt it was on purpose.

Most newgrounders will lose their attention with this flash in 2 minutes, and the action stuff don't happen till many minutes in.

Oh yeah, that's a tough thing to fix just because the way I made it.

Just add "WAIT FOR THE FIGHTSCENE, IT'S WORTH IT" on the author's notes or whatever. and D: no fix then?

Lol, I was thinking of writing that too.

:333

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**Snow Taradien** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 12:07 am

So, are you gonna update the site at all when you upload it there?

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The petals fall as snowflakes

Cast upon the waters surface
As shadows on the wind

We look and see the truth
Hidden behind a veil of lies

A perfect cherry blossom
Lost and forgotten, to the shifting sands of time

**Korah Hyoutetsu** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 12:16 am

Enjoy guys! I hope you the wait was worth it. Oh, btw, you're going to see some unexpected changes in there...

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/517163

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Dialg8 · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:02 am

You should also create a news post for it and I also rated an 5.

**Snow Taradien** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:21 am

I like what you did there.

Awesome.

If I could still log in to newgrounds i'd 5 it but, I can't.

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Flowers
The petals fall as snowflakes

Cast upon the waters surface
As shadows on the wind

We look and see the truth
Hidden behind a veil of lies

A perfect cherry blossom
Lost and forgotten, to the shifting sands of time

Dialg8 · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:22 am

Snow Taradien wrote:

I like what you did there.

Awesome.

If I could still log in to newgrounds i'd 5 it but, I can't.

You could still vote. But your voting power won't be much.

**Luna** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:27 am

You still didn't remove the sigh, NF <_<

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**Korah Hyoutetsu** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:28 am

*Sigh*

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**Luna** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 4:35 am

lawl
EDIT: also, you misspelled portrait in the credits.

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**Deuxelim** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 6:37 am

Deux wrote:

It's getting better, much better.
Won't be long now, till it develops into something fantastic.
Although you could've given my protraits a little more anti-aliasing.
But it's okay.
You've put alot of effort into this and I do feel that you deserve 10 and a 5 for all the hard work you've put in these last few months.
But maybe...we should make the credits more colorful and unique.
~Deux A.K.A. Deus Ex Angelo A.K.A BDG

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**Korah Hyoutetsu** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 3:29 pm

Thanks, Deux.

I figured I'd only get sixth place. I only lost by a few points. I just wish I had that 4.1 back. Frustrated

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**Deuxelim** · Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sat Nov 07, 2009 8:47 pm

Korah Hyoutetsu wrote:

Thanks, Deux.

I figured I'd only get sixth place. I only lost by a few points. I just wish I had that 4.1 back. Frustrated

\Well if it's good enough to get the daily 6th place,

think of how good it will be later down the road.

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