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Aiden
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 |  Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?*  Thu Oct 08, 2009 12:45 am | |
| Well, some of it was kinda well-implemented. Others, particularly for Snow.... Yeah, Snow's Voiceacting made me lol. He didn't sound like he cared as much for Rachel as the text would lead you to believe... EDIT: Also, you could put the flash onto Deviantart as a submission, but I can't say I blame you if you don't at this point. |
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dlo2010
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Thu Oct 08, 2009 1:46 am | |
| Ok, i'm gonna be very honest with you. Some places it worked, and some places it just didn't. Korah's voice is alright, but when you used it for the battle near the end, it sounded pretty terrible. Put more feeling into it! you overused the "umm" a little too much as well. Heroes never say "Um", they always know what they're going to say, and what they say inspires you so much that you feel like selling your house and donating the money to a worthy cause. Snow's voice was fine, you just need somebody that can make it sound real. |
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Deuxelim
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Element:: Dark
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Thu Oct 08, 2009 2:59 am | |
| | Snow Taradien wrote: | | Deuxelim wrote: | Actually the voice overs were pretty well done!
except...for that sigh... |
IT'S GROSS! I GET IT! |
Sorry, Snow.. |
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Mitsuki
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Race:: Angelis
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Thu Oct 08, 2009 4:05 am | |
| Omg the voice acting makes it so much better X3 I loved it when Korah said 'Bring it on' near the end XD SO COOL! X3 _________________  |
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Deuxelim
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Thu Oct 08, 2009 4:19 pm | |
| Okay there is something I want to point out. When Rachel gets struck by the soldiers blade, her eyes should be opened all the way, to emphasize a point of impact. |
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Snow Taradien
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Race:: Angelis
Element:: Ice
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Thu Oct 08, 2009 4:24 pm | |
| | Deuxelim wrote: | Okay there is something I want to point out.
When Rachel gets struck by the soldiers blade, her eyes should be opened all the way, to emphasize a point of impact. |
I never even thought of that, awesome idea.
Agreed on this.
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Flowers
The petals fall as snowflakes
Cast upon the waters surface
As shadows on the wind
We look and see the truth
Hidden behind a veil of lies
A perfect cherry blossom
Lost and forgotten, to the shifting sands of time
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Aiden
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Element:: Light
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Oct 09, 2009 3:40 am | |
| Also, noticed the dialogue changes, it's much better now. Thanks, Korah. |
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Luna
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Race:: Angel
Element:: Dark
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Oct 09, 2009 7:09 pm | |
| I still see the typo I pointed out though... _________________  |
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Korah Hyoutetsu
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Fri Oct 09, 2009 9:14 pm | |
| Which one? I fixed the typos, but for some reason some of them got erased. _________________  |
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Korah Hyoutetsu
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sun Oct 11, 2009 5:52 am | |
| I've worked on it a lot today. I implemented some new things in there, but I'm not sure if it turned out as well as I wanted it to. You'll see what I mean tomorrow. _________________ |
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Kazyest
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sun Oct 11, 2009 3:33 pm | |
| Hi Im neww....... Anyways I liked the voice overs but I was thinking shouldnt Snow's voice be a bit deeper, Since hes all older than Korah? |
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Korah Hyoutetsu
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sun Oct 11, 2009 5:08 pm | |
| Angelis time does not equal human time. Although he is very old in human time, he's young in Angelis time. _________________ |
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Dialg8
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Sun Oct 11, 2009 8:42 pm | |
| You spelled exact wrong. When Korah said "Bring it on " when fighting the bandits, that was nice. |
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Korah Hyoutetsu
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| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Mon Oct 12, 2009 1:16 am | |
| I inserted a Korah drawing in there, I don't think it came out so well. Hope you like what I've done with the fight scene, though. Remember to just click on Scene III to go straight ot the update. http://sirtopeia.com/users/blizzardblade/chapters/Ep%204.swfI'll probably be throwing in a dragon screech in there. _________________ |
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Aiden
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Race:: Fox [Anthro]
Element:: Light
Member Points: 4
| | Subject: Re: Chapter Four *Update?* Mon Oct 12, 2009 1:24 am | |
| Wow, for some reason I got killer lag when Snow was in the temple at the end there. Anyone else getting that? Also, I think the retina shouldn't really leave the boundaries of the eyes, it would make it look better. EDIT: Disregard that last part, I just watched it again and it looks fine. EDIT2: Korah, could you please change the arrow drawing sprites? I colored the eyes blue instead of just leaving them black. |
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